Story concept

Since ancient times mankind has understood that by injecting women who were in-between 2 and 5 months pregnant with the blood of a female animal that you could affect her babies’ development. It is believed this was first discovered when people witnessed abnormalities in babies when their mother was bitten by an animal around the midsection months before giving birth. Once a baby grows into adulthood carrying the animal trait they can pass it on to their children, but the trait will weaken and gradually ware out in two or three generations. There is only one way to make sure your children carry the trait and that is to breed with another animal like human. It was this discovery that sparked the creation of clans nearly six thousand years ago; super cells of humans with similar animal traits. The clans span the entire globe with sections in most major cities.

While most ancient civilizations worshiped the animal-humans the Roman Catholic Church was the first major organization to try to control the clans. The church deemed all who carried the trait and their allies ungodly and started to massacre them at random. The clans fought back by assassinating many of the churches top officials and steeling and burning important church documents. Even though the clans eventually forced the church to stop their onslaught they saw a pressing need to take their existence underground. They hid there identities and created myths to hide historical evidence of their being. They created a task force of joint clan members and humans to find rouge clan members and unregistered trait carrying humans before they can expose the clan’s secrets. They also agreed not to use guns in fights among clans so they wouldn’t draw to much attention to themselves.

There are currently five major clans.

• Vampire clan, a group of people who drink human and other mammal’s blood. They are known for their long lifespan and pointy canine teeth, some of the stronger purebloods are said to even have bat like wings but no one knows for sure. They are able to emit hormones from their bodies in ways to make animals pass out hallucinate or feel certain sensations, even pain. They also have paralyzing agents in their teeth.

• Werewolf clan, a group of people who have long nails and teeth. Despite popular belief most are not like wolves, they are more like apes. Some even resemble cats in their looks and traits. They are able to move rapidly. They have great balance, hearing and scent. They are also known for having strange hair and eye color.

• Raptor clan, a group of people who have keen eyesight and hollow bones. Their bodies are extremely light and they can jump great distances with little effort. They often have pointy nails and long noses. Their eyesight and hearing combine to make them extremely powerful opponents at long range.

• Reptile clan, this clan is known for their extreme capabilities under water are in high risk areas. They can withstand high heats with no problems. They have a great sense of smell and skin as hard as rock. The only downside is they cannot handle cool weather. Some of the stronger members of this clan can spit poison change their skin color and squeeze the life from an advisories body in minutes.

• Insect clan, this clan just emerged as a major clan after years dormancy so no one knows what abilities characterizes their members.

That’s the background of my story. I plan on having my comic begin when the main character (an aspiring Mauy Thai fighter living in Vegas) is pick pocketed by a raptor clans member who he chases and fights. After a few failed attempts the main character lands a kick on the clan member and breaks his leg. He takes the guy to a local hospital, but when he leaves a group of police beat and capture him then drag him into a dark room. After some questioning they decide to add him to the joint clan police force because of his fighting skills and the story goes on from there.

Please tell me what I should change; and also feel free to make a character. You can choose any clan or animal like ability you want… nothing to strong though.

Thanks ahead of time.