Well, I couldn't help you in the writer department, but I have a name for the country. Shanai? It
's sound...country-like to me.

Look out the window. And doesn't this remind you of when you were in the boat, and then later than night, you were lying, looking up at the ceiling, and the water in your head was not dissimilar from the landscape, and you think to yourself, "Why is it that the landscape is moving, but the boat is still?" -Dead Man

I can try to help you out, but I have a several questions:
When you say the 18th Century, do you mean 18th Century on Earth? Are you going for the look and feel of 18th Century Earth for your comic? Are you trying to make it historically accurate and fit this story into the history of 18th Century Earth, like the story could have happened back then?

Is this holy land of Kaori physically located in the Kingdom of King Togashi or is it a neighboring land?

What does the bakery have to do with the overall story? Is the story centered around the bakery or is it centered around Sayaka?
How do you want the story to end?

What do you want to be the tone of the story? Do you want it to be Action/Adventure with a comedy thrown in? Do you want it to be a darker story about Sayaka and her struggles to defend her holy land?

How do you want the story formatted? Over smaller american comic issues or a longer set piece contained in one large book (like some manga and graphic novels). I ask this because that can affect the pacing of your story. With smaller chapters with single issues you would have to have mini-plot resolution and action to keep action moving from issue to issue. Whereas with a single larger book, you can take more time with the pacing to build up characters and situation.

That does lead me to another question. How would you like the pacing of the book. Would you like it say slow and take time to show scenes that help define and flesh out each character or do you want action to carry the story more and characterization can be shown by the actions and dialogue of the characters during the action.

How serious are you about this story? Is this just a story you want to do for fun or are you interested in getting it published someday.

That's all the questions I have for now.

David

1. 18th century in earth but I'm not making it based on true history like the revolutionary war and stuff but the language and culture are the same.

2. It's located just outside of the land

3. The bakery kinda shows sayaka as an able adult owning a business. the bakery is like sayaka's settle and calm life other than the whole war conflict thing, otherwise it's really about Sayaka's destiny and her fate. And the story could end with Miho and sayaka Joining forces and killing Togashi. the Sayaka would take over a queen or something and marry her love intrest, Nobuya.

4. like an american issues and chapters because it would give the whole what's gonna happen next idea.

5. I like what you said before, and action/adventure with comedy thrown into the mix. And the dark side would be neat because it shows another side to her like her childhood.

6. i wanna start slow, to introduce characters and set the plot. Then once that's in place, the pace can pick up to the climax and keep up at a moderate speed till the exposition.

7. it's really for fun, i hope to publish it hopefully but for now I'm gonna keep it on my site and post new issues every week or two(that time limit will vary beacuse of school and stuff)

I hope that helps ^_^

And for Orypeci, that's a cool name ^_^!

I gotta have my purple stuff!!!

This is very rough and vague so it's easily changed to fit what you want (and I did this on the fly).

Start out focusing on the bakery and the area around the bakery. Show the various people at the bakery and the village life around it (I assume it’s not a bakery out in the middle of no where). There can be small problems like wild animals/monsters and bandits. This gives a chance to show the lighter side of everyone in the bakery.

But with the dangers of a more frontier type lifestyle (like wild animals and bandits) one of the village elders tries to promote joining with the neighboring kingdom for support and protection. At first it’s a civil discussion but then there seems to be undue pressure from unseen forces for the village to join with the kingdom.

It’s discovered that some saboteurs were trying to sway the village to want to join the Kingdom. The Village elder was unaware that the kingdom was going to do that, but sadly it’s guilt by association for him.

The king being impatient sends the military to annex the area. At first the village manages a decent attempt at resisting the annex, but that was more to do that the military commander wasn’t trying his hardest (on purpose). Finally he king threatens the military commander and so he has to take over the village.

Displaced and homeless, Sayaka and her friends wander the kingdom a bit trying to find a place to fit in. There’s a culture clash between the villagers and the people of the kingdom. Finally the village elder finds them and gives them a place to stay. While setting up their new life, Sayaka hears about what the king is doing to her homeland and she can’t let it go.

So at first Sayaka tries to work against the kingdom alone, but that quickly gets her imprisoned and then scheduled for excution. Her friends rescure her and then help her work against the kingdom.

So they work against the kingdom and finally join up with other rebels and malcontents. This attracts the attention of the king who sends the military to finally get rid of the rebels. After a bit of cat and mouse the General has grown tired of the evils of the King and decides to stage a coup with the rebels help.

The coup is a success, but soon after Sayaka is installed as queen, forces still loyal to the old king find his 1st Cousin and make them king as per the laws. So Sayaka disolves the kingdom and starts an election.

I like it! The idea of being rebels is great and shows their hate toward the king and his decree to take his home.

1 thing though, the part where the village takes them in, let's have a nurse or some nanny-like figure living with them and help them start a business because they need money and are despirate.

I gotta have my purple stuff!!!

I wanna write 4U!
Can I?

People in stone houses should not throw glass.

I'd like to help if I can... I hope to read it soon though... Wow, David you need to help me with my stories!!! :wide eyed:

That's what I needed to say, and I said it!

It's a good Idea, alot of directers might want to make a movie about it,R U up 4 the challenge of media?

People in stone houses should not throw glass.