I was wondering if any of you would be willing to look over the prolouge for TLIE and tell me what you think? Is it too dense to read, or did you like it?

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/44601801/?qo=4&q=by%3Akrazyelfkith&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps

Please ignore formatting errors. It didn't transfer well to DA.